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comments:
Client:
Hello,
Today i had meeting with my supervisor and his first comment was very disappointing for me. He said that its a. Bachelor level work. There is proper story building in the paper. My factors are something else and paper is saying somthing else. And the explanation of results is too poor. It seems that wirter doesn’t know the quantitative explanation of each number. He didn’t said anything properly.
Client:
*no proper story building
Client:
Actually, the wrok is not upto the PhD level and quantitative research writing is not good for PhD level and extra for SPSS software work. But in paper both are lacking.
Results section must be written by a quantitative expert and there must be coherence in the paper. As i have made some changes. I can send a new word file. (12499938)
In result section tables are ok but its explanations needed to be improved. Hypotheses development must be more scientific. And rest of the need coherence in it. It seems like abstract and introduction is saying something else and literature review is saying else result and findings are the part of other paper. So please full make it like a single paper and develop story of the paper based on research question and its results.
Client:
And please tell the writer to use names of factors, dependent and independent variables instead of sayin them variables.
Client:
One more thing, Language and Academic writing should be also improve.
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comments:
Client:
Hello,
Today i had meeting with my supervisor and his first comment was very disappointing for me. He said that its a. Bachelor level work. There is proper story building in the paper. My factors are something else and paper is saying somthing else. And the explanation of results is too poor. It seems that wirter doesn’t know the quantitative explanation of each number. He didn’t said anything properly.
Client:
*no proper story building
Client:
Actually, the wrok is not upto the PhD level and quantitative research writing is not good for PhD level and extra for SPSS software work. But in paper both are lacking.
Results section must be written by a quantitative expert and there must be coherence in the paper. As i have made some changes. I can send a new word file. (12499938)
In result section tables are ok but its explanations needed to be improved. Hypotheses development must be more scientific. And rest of the need coherence in it. It seems like abstract and introduction is saying something else and literature review is saying else result and findings are the part of other paper. So please full make it like a single paper and develop story of the paper based on research question and its results.
Client:
And please tell the writer to use names of factors, dependent and independent variables instead of sayin them variables.”