The Thesis statement should be two sentence Max. the first sentence should be argument and the second sentence would be list of claim Thesis section needs a considerable rewrite. the purpose of the speech is to persuade. but this phrased is very geared at informing instead of persuading. The word “audience” should not be there. please rewrite the argument.
1. pick a TARGETED audience. talk directly to or about them. who you think would benefit most from changing eating habits.
2. once you have an audience give them a directive of some sort ( usually using the word “should” “must” or “need to” or should not, must not, etc.).
3. after the directive, use a “because” to explain your umbrella reason. (the thing all your claim fit under). this will fully develop the argument by explaining to them WHY they should end up agreeing with you.
In other world, try something like this:
“[Audience ] should/should not [directive] because [reason].” then list your claim in one sentence.
4. two off the highlight evidence looks like informative. it should be convincing
Please do the highlighted area. The Thesis statement should be two sentence Max. the first sentence should be argument and the second sentence would be list of claim Thesis section needs a considerable rewrite. the purpose of the speech is to persuade. but this phrased is very geared at informing instead of persuading. The word “audience” should not be there. please rewrite the argument.
1. pick a TARGETED audience. talk directly to or about them. who you think would benefit most from changing eating habits.
2. once you have an audience give them a directive of some sort ( usually using the word “should” “must” or “need to” or should not, must not, etc.).
3. after the directive, use a “because” to explain your umbrella reason. (the thing all your claim fit under). this will fully develop the argument by explaining to them WHY they should end up agreeing with you.
In other world, try something like this:
“[Audience ] should/should not [directive] because [reason].” then list your claim in one sentence.
4. two off the highlight evidence looks like informative. it should be convincing
On conclusion should be persuading to audience. what should the can do after speech. not a just giving information.On conclusion should be persuading to audience. what should the can do after speech. not a just giving information.